Elsie+Lock+2011

__**Thursday 9th June 2011**__


 * Elsie Locke Story - Edited**

My dad says that he is going to come up stairs and inspect my wardrobe and I have to make sure that it is spotless. Its going to be a challenge because my wardrobe is really messy. I have about 15 minutes until he comes up so I’ve got to hurry!

I walk over to my wardrobe and open the doors. I stare in my wardrobe in disgust. “Ew!” I scream. This is the most untidy wardrobe ever! The stink is horrifying and how am I supposed to get my wardrobe super clean before dad comes. I think for a moment, but give up. Just before I turn around to walk away from my wardrobe, my body starts to shrink. Down, down, down I go until I suddenly stop only at the size of a mouse. I look around and everything is gigantic. I glanced back at my wardrobe. Well, since I have shrunk, maybe I should go and take a look into my wardrobe and see what I can find. I slowly turn around and walk to my wardrobe. I pop my head in from one end and take a long look inside. What I see is disgusting, revolting, horrifying, foul, the most nastiest things I have ever seen! Its time to face my fears one on one. I take my first steps into my wardrobe.

“OH MY GOD, that is revolting!” I say out loud. I find an apple core lying on the floor. Brown and black with spots all over it. I try to push it out of the way without touching it but it’s to heavy for me. I stride further into my wardrobe taking in everything I see. Muesli bar rappers, old wet towels, even dirty cloths that haven’t been in the was for months! Just think what dad is going to say when he sees this! I am so dead. I sit at the end of my wardrobe and start to cry. Why didn’t I just keep my wardrobe tidy o why didn’t I? I go back to crying. Suddenly I perk up, Hang on a minute? All I need to do is pick up these things and put them where they should be. That isn’t such a hard job, is it? From there I stand up, give my hands a quick brush, roll up my sleeves and set to work.

The job was immense but I got it done before dad came up to inspect my room. Almost instantly by body started to grow back to its normal size. Just as I expected my dad popped his head around my door and walks in. “Well, done Jolene, your wardrobe is nice and tidy. Great job.” Said dad. “But look at that room of yours. It is a disgrace so now you can start your room.” He says as he walks out of my room. Oh No! I think to myself. Here I go again.

Elise Connor Room 41 Rimu House Tauranga Intermediate School

__**Thursday 9th June 2011**__


 * Elsie Locke Story:**

Target - Next Steps Elise, edit the “ “ out of your writing when you are thinking, only use them if you are saying it out loud. Remember not to ramble & get to the point with descriptive language (as discussed).

My dad says that he is going to come up stairs and inspect my wardrobe and I have to make sure that it is spotless. Its going to be a challenge because my wardrobe is really messy. I have about 15 minutes until he comes up so I’ve got to hurry!

I walk over to my wardrobe and open the doors. I stare in my wardrobe in disgust. “Ew!” I scream. This is the most untidy wardrobe ever! The stink is horrifying and how am I supposed to get my wardrobe super clean before dad comes. I think for a moment, but give up. Just before I turn around to walk away from my wardrobe, my body starts to shrink. Down, down, down I go until I suddenly stop only the size of a mouse. I look around and everything is gigantic. I look back at my wardrobe. “Well, since I have shrunk, maybe I should go and take a look into my wardrobe and see what I can find.” I slowly turn around and walk to my wardrobe. I pop my head in from one end and take a long look inside. What I see is disgusting, revolting, horrifying, foul and the most nastiest things I have ever seen! “Its time to face my fears one on one.” I take my first steps into my wardrobe.

“OH MY GOD, that is revolting” I find an apple core lying on the floor. Brown and black with spots all over it. I try to push out of the way without touching it but that didn’t work. I stride further into my wardrobe taking in everything I see. Muesli bar rappers, old wet towels, even dirty cloths that haven’t been in the was for months! “Just think what dad is going to say when he sees this! I am so dead.” I sit at the end of my wardrobe and start to cry. Suddenly I perk up, with my back as straight as straight can be, “Hang on a minute? All I need to do is pick up these things and put them where they should be. That isn’t such a hard job, is it?” From there I stand up, give my hands a quick brush and set to work.

The job was immense but I got it done before dad came up to inspect my room. I hear foot steps coming up the stairs. And as I expected my dad popped his head around my door and walks in. “Well, done Jolene, your wardrobe is nice and tidy. Great job.” Said dad. “But look at that room of yours. It is a disgrace so now you can start your room.” He says as he walks out of my room. “Oh No!” I think to myself. Here we go again.

__**Thursday 12 May 2011**__

**Elsie Locke 2011 Story - A journey through my wardrobe**

**Characters:** Me

**Setting:** My wardrobe

**Plot:** Doesn’t really have a plot?

**Basic Idea:** My dad says that he is going to come up to inspect my wardrobe. Then I shrink to about 10 centimeters and go into my wardrobe and take a look. I describe everything that I see and I take a journey through my wardrobe. In the end I become big again and tidy up my wardrobe before dad comes and I tell him everything that I cleaned up and then I tell him the journey I took through my wardrobe.

**Story:** My dad says that he is going to come up stairs ad inspect my wardrobe and I have to make sure that it is spotless

__**Wednesday 18th May 2011**__

“My dad says that he is going to come up stairs and inspect my wardrobe and I have to make sure that it is spotless. Its going to be a challenge because my wardrobe is really messy. I have about 15 minutes until he comes up so I’ve got to hurry!”. I walk over to my wardrobe and open the doors. I stare in my wardrobe in discuss. “Ew!” I scream. “This is the most untidy wardrobe ever! The stink is horrifying and how am I supposed to get that thing super clean. I think for a moment “Oh I give up.” Just before I turn around to walk away from my wardrobe, my body starts to shrink. Down, down, down my body goes until I suddenly stop. I look around. My body seems to be extremely small and everything around me seems to be really big. I figure that I have shrunk to about the size of a mouse. I look back at my wardrobe. “Well, since I have shrunk, maybe I should go and take a look into my wardrobe and see what I can find.” I slowly turn around and walk to my wardrobe. I pop my head in from one end and take a long look inside. What I see is disgusting, revolting, horrifying, foul and the most nastiest things I have ever seen! “Its time to face my fears one on one.” I take my first steps into my wardrobe.

“OH MY GOD, that is revolting” I find an apple core lying on the floor. Brown and black with spots all over it. I try to push out of the way without touching it

__**Thursday 26th May 2011**__ “My dad says that he is going to come up stairs and inspect my wardrobe and I have to make sure that it is spotless. Its going to be a challenge because my wardrobe is really messy. I have about 15 minutes until he comes up so I’ve got to hurry!” I say to my teddy bear. I walk over to my wardrobe and open the doors. I stare in my wardrobe in disgust. “Ew!” I scream. “This is the most untidy wardrobe ever! The stink is horrifying and how am I supposed to get that thing super clean. I think for a moment “Oh I give up.” Just before I turn around to walk away from my wardrobe, my body starts to shrink. Down, down, down my body goes until I suddenly stop. I look around. My body seems to be extremely small and everything around me seems to be really big. I figure that I have shrunk to about the size of a mouse. I look back at my wardrobe. “Well, since I have shrunk, maybe I should go and take a look into my wardrobe and see what I can find.” I slowly turn around and walk to my wardrobe. I pop my head in from one end and take a long look inside. What I see is disgusting, revolting, horrifying, foul and the most nastiest things I have ever seen! “Its time to face my fears one on one.” I take my first steps into my wardrobe.

“OH MY GOD, that is revolting” I find an apple core lying on the floor. Brown and black with spots all over it. I try to push out of the way without touching it but that didn’t work. I stride further into my wardrobe taking in everything I see. Muesli bar rapper, old wet towels even dirty cloths that haven’t been in the was for months! “Just think what dad is going to say when he sees this!” I sit at the end of my wardrobe and start to cry. “Hang on a minute? All I need to do is pick up these things and put them where they should be. That isn’t such a hard job, is it?” From there I stand up, give my hands a quick brush and set to work.

__**Thursday 2nd June 2011**__ __Elsie Locke Writing 2__

“Come on Ash, we are going to be late if we carry on at this pace,” exclaims Courtney running down the road. The two of them had just finished school and were going home to Courtney’s house. “We don’t have to hurry, were not in a rush. Your mum can wait,” says Ash. “No, she cant. What if she has to go to the hospital or something? Or what if she is about to die or something?"

__**Tuesday 7th June 2011**__

__Elsie Locke Writing 2__

“Come on Ash, we are going to be late if we carry on at this pace,” exclaims Courtney running down the road. The two of them had just finished school and were going home to Courtney’s house. “We don’t have to hurry, were not in a rush. Your mum can wait,” says Ash. “No, she cant. What if she has to go to the hospital or something? Or what if she is about to die. We HAVE to hurry!” Courtney started to run. Faster and faster she got. Soon she was sprinting down the highway at full speed not turning to look back and see if Ash was keeping up with. He wasn’t. He was far down the road trying to keep her in his sight. Suddenly he sees a black car pull up beside her. He runs up to Courtney and looks at the man in the car. He was wearing black with blood shot eyes. It seemed that Courtney thought that he looked okay but really he looked like a drug addict who wants to kill us. “Come on Courtney, lets just carry on walking home.” “No, lets just get into this car and get a ride home, besides, my legs are starting to get really sore, don’t you think?”